This is so lovely, because it gives us all the character background we need to establish why Bella/Alice could totally be the central ship here.
Alice's pov is the most daunting cuase she's a bit of an underdeveloped character in the book so it's really cool that you take us through what's going on for her with Bella: the instructions from Edward about humans, her warmth, the bi-scentual thing - and 'I'm not a scentophobe' - cracked me up.
You managed to make Bella's humanness interesting: the fact that she can see Edward's coaching in Alice's reaction, the bit about Chester. YOu also reminded me of what made me uncomfortable about her in the books: she's knows her 'scent' power with Edward and now Alice and she consciously or unconsciously uses it to her advantage.
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Date: 2008-08-04 02:48 pm (UTC)Alice's pov is the most daunting cuase she's a bit of an underdeveloped character in the book so it's really cool that you take us through what's going on for her with Bella: the instructions from Edward about humans, her warmth, the bi-scentual thing - and 'I'm not a scentophobe' - cracked me up.
You managed to make Bella's humanness interesting: the fact that she can see Edward's coaching in Alice's reaction, the bit about Chester. YOu also reminded me of what made me uncomfortable about her in the books: she's knows her 'scent' power with Edward and now Alice and she consciously or unconsciously uses it to her advantage.