This was a really nice story, I love how wonderful it was!
It was so cool how Helena was making all these moves and I thought it was really cute how awkawrd Myka got. Then it showed how vunerable Helena was and just revealed a wonderful aspect to their growing relationship.
Bravo, you pulled it beautifully.
Just these lines didn't make complete sense:
'Probably too pleased, but she choose not to think about that at the moment.' Chose would have been better.
'she realized that she had best do something before she given into the urge.'
And gave would have been better, I hope I wasn't being annoying.
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Date: 2011-08-25 08:39 am (UTC)It was so cool how Helena was making all these moves and I thought it was really cute how awkawrd Myka got. Then it showed how vunerable Helena was and just revealed a wonderful aspect to their growing relationship.
Bravo, you pulled it beautifully.
Just these lines didn't make complete sense:
'Probably too pleased, but she choose not to think about that at the moment.'
Chose would have been better.
'she realized that she had best do something before she given into the urge.'
And gave would have been better, I hope I wasn't being annoying.