I thought it was very well written and am interested in where it's going but the ending was too smart for me. I really didn't understand what Ivy was doing or wot.. I think that's the main idea in this fic and I kinda missed it. But the dialogue and the characters flowed smoothly. It felt very lifelike. It is very Ivy to talk in riddles. Rachel's smarter than me, that's scary.
Oh Glenn, just get out. It's not worth it. Find someone who is less trouble. So conflicted, this hot chick Ivy, who's also a total badass, self-reliant, porn star, lots of money and sorta vulnerable and lonely at the same time, but on the other hand she's kinda scary and probably will get you killed at some point, because she hangs around this crazy ass black demon spawn witch called Rachel, who about everybody in the supernatural world hates and wants to kill until dead.
One of my problems also is how Ivy just seems to be suddenly attracted to whatever animate or inanimate object. David, then Glenn, then this new chick that I read about in reviews. There's no buildup, no way for the readers to be actually invested in the relationship. Or perhaps it's just my inability to see Ivy with anyone else except Rachel version one point o.
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Date: 2010-03-02 12:49 am (UTC)Oh Glenn, just get out. It's not worth it. Find someone who is less trouble. So conflicted, this hot chick Ivy, who's also a total badass, self-reliant, porn star, lots of money and sorta vulnerable and lonely at the same time, but on the other hand she's kinda scary and probably will get you killed at some point, because she hangs around this crazy ass black demon spawn witch called Rachel, who about everybody in the supernatural world hates and wants to kill until dead.
One of my problems also is how Ivy just seems to be suddenly attracted to whatever animate or inanimate object. David, then Glenn, then this new chick that I read about in reviews. There's no buildup, no way for the readers to be actually invested in the relationship. Or perhaps it's just my inability to see Ivy with anyone else except Rachel version one point o.