There are so many things I love about this story... Its so quiet, and yet you can feel the building emotion deep down. I loved the reference to feeling like "Charlie with the golden ticket in his hand"-- that was perfect.
One smallish thing however- It was apparent that on this fic you might benefit from a beta who spoke spanish. Not to 'toot my own horn' (god, did i just say that?) but I am fairly fluent in the language, and would be happy to help you make some of Nadia's phrases more accurate. The only reason I bring it up is because coming across phrases like "Bonito mucho" (which means "pretty" but in the physical sence) threw me off and took me away from the story for precious moments which shouldnt have to be lost.
:) Up to you, of course. Let me know if you are interested.
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Date: 2005-10-26 03:19 am (UTC)One smallish thing however- It was apparent that on this fic you might benefit from a beta who spoke spanish. Not to 'toot my own horn' (god, did i just say that?) but I am fairly fluent in the language, and would be happy to help you make some of Nadia's phrases more accurate. The only reason I bring it up is because coming across phrases like "Bonito mucho" (which means "pretty" but in the physical sence) threw me off and took me away from the story for precious moments which shouldnt have to be lost.
:) Up to you, of course. Let me know if you are interested.